first attempt to write lyrics

[Oscar]

I'm from dallas, texas, where people ride a lexus
i listen to 2Pac & Pimp C, can't you see
when you roll down the streets, listenin to the hardcore beats
you smell the mexican food,it gets u in a good mood
even better when you taste it, you'll love every bit
one day you'll see me tollin in a lexus, but it wont be in texas
you'll wanna roll with me, i'll say let me be
in the heart of dallas, do you hear the heavy bass
people gatherin in a mass, listenin to 2Pac
thats whats here in dallas, come check us out sometime


i wrote this cuz i needed it for school homework
the lines have to be where you're from
also have to include the five senses
hear, taste, smell, see, feel

[Macello]

It was cool man,good for your first time.
Fixed some parts for you and added somethin'

I'm from dallas, texas, where people ride in a lexus
I listen to 2Pac & Pimp C, Can't you see its just Kick Back
I'll lay the track out, Don't back out just Lean Back
When you roll down the streets, listenin to the hardcore beats
Smell the mexican food,it gets u in a good mood
It's even better when you taste it, you'll love every bit
one day you'll see me Rollin in a lexus, it wont be in texas
you wanna roll with me?, i'll say let It be roll with me
In the heart of dallas, hear the heavy bass
People gatherin in a mass, listenin to 2Pac who surpassed his Expectations
Congrations you're here in one of the greatest cities in the nation
thats whats here in dallas, come check us out sometime

[T.B.G.]

do u guys talk in mexican when u pm eac other?lol

that was great for a first attempt.....i remember my first attempt....ya'll dont wwanna know anything about it....

but this was dope for a first attempt M-Man

[Oscar]

It was cool man,good for your first time.
Fixed some parts for you and added somethin'

I'm from dallas, texas, where people ride in a lexus
I listen to 2Pac & Pimp C, Can't you see its just Kick Back
I'll lay the track out, Don't back out just Lean Back
When you roll down the streets, listenin to the hardcore beats
Smell the mexican food,it gets u in a good mood
It's even better when you taste it, you'll love every bit
one day you'll see me Rollin in a lexus, it wont be in texas
you wanna roll with me?, i'll say let It be roll with me
In the heart of dallas, hear the heavy bass
People gatherin in a mass, listenin to 2Pac who surpassed his Expectations
Congrations you're here in one of the greatest cities in the nation
thats whats here in dallas, come check us out sometime

thanks that sounds good but i cant turn it anymore haha
repped

do u guys talk in mexican when u pm eac other?lol

that was great for a first attempt.....i remember my first attempt....ya'll dont wwanna know anything about it....

but this was dope for a first attempt M-Man

umm..no i hardly pm any1
thanks btw rep

[Shiva]

first verse

startin to produce my music, dats what im all about
people keep hatin hard, keep yappin der big mouth
im doin my solo ting cus now im on my grind
use to be a neek but now far from the kind
was inspired by the legend the king 2pac
he taught me the game and how to love rap

[Oscar]

Uh dude ur not supposed to post ur first attempt but comment on my attempt
if u want response make a own thread about it

[Shiva]

ohhhh my bad, i like it, its pretty good as it includes all the sences in there for 1 verse. i like the way dpg92 edited as well.

[Burns Luciano]

i like mexican food too. not bad for your fisrt time

[Nikola]

It was cool man,good for your first time.
Fixed some parts for you and added somethin'

I'm from dallas, texas, where people ride in a lexus
I listen to 2Pac & Pimp C, Can't you see its just Kick Back
I'll lay the track out, Don't back out just Lean Back
When you roll down the streets, listenin to the hardcore beats
Smell the mexican food,it gets u in a good mood
It's even better when you taste it, you'll love every bit
one day you'll see me Rollin in a lexus, it wont be in texas
you wanna roll with me?, i'll say let It be roll with me
In the heart of dallas, hear the heavy bass
People gatherin in a mass, listenin to 2Pac who surpassed his Expectations
Congrations you're here in one of the greatest cities in the nation
thats whats here in dallas, come check us out sometime

rap this flow like 2pac on watch ya mouth, str8 hardcore swimming on funky beat...
i like ur lyrics, very good for begginer, its simple, str8 to point and thats the way i like it