Poem: Homo Apparatus

[Omar]

wote this poem last night randomly .. tell me wat u guys think and whether it makes any sense.Read it a couple of times if possible



HOMO APPARATUS


Delicate balancing
Underwater boats
Theories dancing
White coats


Scientist rats
Sharp teeth
Nazi tats
Under nearh


Spines hacked
Needle pricks
Data backed
Neo's Matrix



Atoms hit
Resulting pair
Neutron split
MC square


Quantum tech
Mindless Clones
Zeppelin Wreck
Armed Drones


Fusion haste
Rotting wombs
Nuclear waste
Plotting tombs


Hidden room
Golden Rope
Faith's doom
Dead Pope


Wind chimes
Never again
End Times
Lucifer's Den


Now acknowledge
This hour
For Knowledge
Is power


Therefore Thus
Homo Apparatus

[Vinnie P]

I really like it. It has this trippy and universal vibe. It challenges the human's mind and imagination and takes you on a stroll into a literary realm. It's up to the reader, they either let this piece mess with their imagination, or they simply read it in a numb way.

[Omar]

I really like it. It has this trippy and universal vibe. It challenges the human's mind and imagination and takes you on a stroll into a literary realm. It's up to the reader, they either let this piece mess with their imagination, or they simply read it in a numb way.

what u said is exactly the effect i wanted this poem to have on the reader ... thank u so much homie .. appreciate the comment ...

i guess i cud improve it ... but for now its ok ... thank u so much Haze

[mussolini]

Omar you're a poet

[Omar]

[MENTION=327]Freddie G


changed the poem a little .. not that you'd remember the original version now cuz i simply edited it .. But what u think??

[Vinnie P]

[MENTION=327]Freddie G


changed the poem a little .. not that you'd remember the original version now cuz i simply edited it .. But what u think??

I wish i could have acid right now just so i can read the poem under the influence. The poem still has a universal feeling. Reading it, i can picture the time lapse in my head. It's vivid. Only people with imagination can feel this poem imo.

Do you think we can revive this section? Maybe create a competition like you mentionned it earlier. Or just for fun, drope something weekly and give feedbacks.

[Omar]

I wish i could have acid right now just so i can read the poem under the influence. The poem still has a universal feeling. Reading it, i can picture the time lapse in my head. It's vivid. Only people with imagination can feel this poem imo.

Do you think we can revive this section? Maybe create a competition like you mentionned it earlier. Or just for fun, drope something weekly and give feedbacks.

I'm down for that .. I'll open a thread tomorrow and we can discuss it there ... Sad that there are so few ppl in this forum that appreciate poetry.. At least it seems like that...

the irony is 2Pac was a fucking poet himself!!!!

[Vinnie P]

I'm down for that .. I'll open a thread tomorrow and we can discuss it there ... Sad that there are so few ppl in this forum that appreciate poetry.. At least it seems like that...

the irony is 2Pac was a fucking poet himself!!!!

True, well even if there is a lack of interest coming from the members we should still do it. i havent written anything decent in ages.

[Omar]

True, well even if there is a lack of interest coming from the members we should still do it. i havent written anything decent in ages.

Agreed .. Nows a good time for me too .. Cuz the holy month for Muslims just started and I'll be clean as a whistle ... And fasting from dawn to dusk everyday .. So i'll sometimes need something to keep me occupied .. Poetry certainly helps pas the time ... Aight ... We'll discuss tomorrow what we can do .. I gotta sleep soon

[Vinnie P]

Agreed .. Nows a good time for me too .. Cuz the holy month for Muslims just started and I'll be clean as a whistle ... And fasting from dawn to dusk everyday .. So i'll sometimes need something to keep me occupied .. Poetry certainly helps pas the time ... Aight ... We'll discuss tomorrow what we can do .. I gotta sleep soon

Sounds good man. Happy ramadan btw.

[mussolini]

Good bump. [MENTION=7784]Omar is talented dude

[Omar]

Good bump. @Omar is talented dude

Now dont post here if its


otherwise i have to delete post as per Law under section 42 of the Freepost Act

[mussolini]

Nah for real bra that poem was mad deep. You went hard in the paint on that

[mussolini]

[MENTION=7784]Omar you inspired me to write a poem. I will post it when finished. I need a title to getstarted though